Draft 2:
Following up on our previous storyboard we have since made a few changes that we feel with benefit and add substance to the plot, in terms of sticking closely to the genre.
Change 1:
Instead of the montage being very much based in a park location we have added a scene where the couple will be simply 'hanging out', possibly 'messing around' with a guitar. We think this will still show the playful nature of the couple and just how happy and comfortable they were before tragedy hit. (Shown above in the first mid shot)
Change 2:
After reviewing shot by shot our whole film opening, we realised the transition between the 'happy, chirpy, love-birds' scene in the montage to the scene with the death of the guy, didnt really appear to make much sense and may not be claear, so we decided to add a short clip whereby the couple are having a heated argument which results in the guy storming out into the road and thats where he's hit. But just before, the girl attempts to call out to him, to save him.
This creates a clear enough reason why the girl feels guilty and has reoccuring dreams concerning the death of her boyfriend. We feel that our audience would quickly be able to put two and two together, that she blames herself.
POSTED BY TOSIN
Draft 1:
Our storyboard gives a shot by shot breakdown of our entire film opening. This includes the use of sound (diegetic and non-diegetic), camera angles, lighting and transitions.
1. (Head on shot- straight into camera lens) Close up of Jennie's face, as she sleeps. (Non-diegetic sound begins- fade out sound)
1A. Collection of four extreme close-ups of Jennie's facial features and a zoom into Jennie's eyelid. (Non-diegetic sounds continues)
2. Screen fades to white, to signify the entering and beginning of Jennie's dream. (Previous non-diegetic sounds pauses, transitions to another as montage begins)
3/3A. Montage (within the dream): 4+ clips showing the couples relationship progression and 'good times' e.g memories of them hanging out over a period of time leading up to the death. (New Non-diegetic sounds continues)
4. (Ending of the montage)- Jennie's boyfreind dies from a fatal car accident. (Diegetic sound of Ambulance Sirens and a faint sounds of a repeating heartbeat)
5. Extreme close up of Jennie's wide eye (Diegetic sound of the heartbeat gradually increases and comes to an abrupt halt as her eye snaps open)
5A. Close up of Jennie's face and chest (as an unexpected hand comes across her chest)
6. Aerial/Birds eye view shot of Jennie and asleep lover on bed.
7. Mid-shot of a disturbed Jennie, head in hands.
7A. Eye-line match/Close up of exactly what Jennie was looking at; Alarm clock covered by a disgarded bra. Pan as Jennie reaches for the bra.
8. Mid shot; affectionate moment between Jennie and her now woken lover. (Dialogue exchange)
Post by Tosin, Stephanie, Shahnaz and Kulsuma
